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    An incomplete and inappropriate love story

    December, 1990:
    The young man was running with his bag. But he missed the train. The express train from Bolpur to Howrah (Kolkata) had just left the station. There were some local trains upto Barddhaman. From Barddhaman, he could get other trains to Howrah, but the route from Bolpur to Barddhaman was not good and there were cases of armed looting in these trains. So, he decided to wait for the next express train which was scheduled after one and a half hour.

    While the young man was killing time on the platform of Bolpur station, he saw her. In the book stall just beside the chamber of the Station Master, both of them tried to purchase a famous travelogue written by Neel Lohit (Sunil Gangyopadhyay), but there was only one copy of the book in the stall. The girl was evidently from Vishwa Bharati University, but unusually she was alone. So, in the evening of December, the young man and young girl started talking. The young man gallantly offered the only copy of the travelogue to the girl. The girl accepted the book with silent gratitude. Both of them took the same train. The girl told that she was studying at Vishwa Bharati University. She was returning home at Barddhaman, because her grandmother has met with an accident in their home. The girl got down at Barddhaman. Before getting down, she told the young man that she would be returning to Bolpur within two days if her 'dadi' was okay. She would then return the book. The young man bade her good bye and resumed his journey to Howrah humming a romantic tune. No. he didn't ask her name.

    The young man extended his weekly leave for one more day. And yes, the co-incidence happened! He could find that girl waiting at Bardhaman station. The girl also saw him, smiled to him and boarded the same compartment. The chatting resumed. The journey from Barddhaman to Bolpur was extremely short for both of them. At the Bolpur station, the young man asked the name of the girl. The girl smiled, lowered her head, and told the name, her Department and the hostel where she stayed at Bolpur.

    Hearing the name, the young man started feeling dizzy. He could not reconcile with the fact that the girl S was from another religious community. With a peculiar sense of betrayal he returned to his work-place.

    After suffering tremendous emotional upheaval, he took a decision. He informed his parents that he would not be coming home in the next week-end due to heavy work-load and went to Vishwa Bharati University to meet S. S was astonished to find him outside her hostel. She never expected that the young man from another community would come to meet her.

    The platonic (?) love of the young man and the young woman from two different religions continued for two years. They came very close to each other, but never dared to discuss the next logical step. The abrupt end of their relationship came in September 1992, when the young man got a much better job offer in Delhi and the girl completed her Masters degree. In another cold winter evening in November 1992, S bade the young man goodbye in front of the Wheeler bookstall of Barddhaman station.

    June 2016:
    The Delhi-bound Rajdhani Express stopped at Barddhaman station. A middle-aged man got down from his compartment, which was incidentally just in front of the Wheeler bookstall. He looked towards the stall with great expectation, but could not find what he wanted. The train started moving. The man re-entered his compartment. He could not find S waiting for him in front of the Wheeler bookstall at Barddhaman station.
  • #568434
    The love story stretching to 26 years was well narrated and it once again proves that for the right person to be in ones life, there can be waiting for many years. Good effort.
    K Mohan
    I consider myself as the learner everyday

  • #568437
    A great love story.
    I enjoyed it but was expecting a happy ending just like Bollywood movies.


    Living & Learning- simultaneous processes!

  • #568440
    You tried your best to write an excellent incomplete and inappropriate love story but failed to put it up as a complete story in this thread. I expected a twist at last. I am disappointed.

    My question is: What was the need to publish your story in this forum? You could have submitted this story in the Article section and fetched more points( No cc to stories in Articles)

    No life without Sun ¤

  • #568443
    Stories with happy endings are perhaps never written, read and appreciated. Most of the romantic stories with unfulfilled wishes and desires are read and appreciated by the readers as they find a streak of their own stories somewhere in between. I estimate that only a very small fraction of individuals are able to get their first love. The stories with happy ending becomes 'ghar ki mugi dal barabar' (what we have appears to have less value compared to what we don't have).
    Let us encourage each other in sharing knowledge.

  • #568444
    #568440: Unexpected twists generally take place in films, not in real life. Life moves on, only memory remains.
    “Whenever I feel the need to exercise, I lie down until it goes away.” - Paul Terry

  • #568446
    Love is an emotional attachment of two people. It may look inappropriate for the world and others but it is not so within itself. If any love is inappropriate, the love would never happen. If any love which happened after seeing the compatibility of religion and cast, that is just attractions between two. It can never be called a love. And this is what actually happened in this story.

    Had they genuinely loved each other, I am sure they would have at least tried to finish their story as a married couple. They were young and single and had great future together. It is not that in our country there is ban on inter religion marriage. I know saying all these is very easy then being in that situation but again in this story I never found that they even tried to make their love successful. So it is just an attraction not love.

    "Any man who stands for progress has to criticize, disbelieve and challenge every item of the old faith." - Sardar Bhagat Singh

  • #568449

    Agree. What you portrayed is a story, not the real life event. You should have avoided the word 'story' in your title. It could have been "An incomplete and inappropriate love affair."

    A real life event too can have surprises.

    Here is the twist- "The train started moving. The man re-entered his compartment. To his utter surprise, he found Ms. S sitting opposite to his seat with her daughter ( similar to young Ms. S of 1990) holding her daughter on her lap."

    No life without Sun ¤

  • #568451
    #568449: If people observe, they would find stories in small events happening everyday.

    How can I write which didn't happen in June, 2016?

    “Whenever I feel the need to exercise, I lie down until it goes away.” - Paul Terry

  • #568453
    If I am to give a real twist to the story, I think the young man had been to his hometown recently and very well knowing that S must have been married by now as he is, had, due to a nostalgic instinct, got down at the Barddhaman station and looked for those sweet memories near the Wheeler book stall.
    The author, as said by him, has penned down a page from life rather than just a story.

    Knowledge is knowing tomato is a fruit; Wisdom is not putting it in fruit salad - Miles Kington.

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