| Author: Mala 03 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating:  Points: 3 |
............and i hear a sound...it was the alarm of the clock.
Oh! Its 7 am now. Then i looked at the calender and then realised its a Sunday... Wow!! So nice. I put off the alarm clock and slept for a while..
|
| Author: vijay 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 4 |
.......in my day dream,
I saw one beautiful girl lifting me up from the bed and hugged me. She asked me, "Can we have coffee in restaurant". I said, "Why not! just a minute I will get ready". I changed my dress , combed my hair, had face wash, applied fair and lovely and started my bike. Then. ( Please continue this story with your imagination)
|
| Author: Mala 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
............ and started my bike. What a bad luck.. there was no petrol in my Bike. I didn't even have a single paise in my pocket.
My dad had given Rs. 1000/- to purchase a demand draft on "The Hindustan Lever Limited". The timing of the bank for purchase or demand draft is only from 9:00am to 11:00AM as it is a Sunday. By the time I woke up and got ready and tried staring my bike it was 10:30AM.... Only half an hour left out.. What to do...........
|
| Author: vijay 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 3 |
Hi Mala,
There are some grammar mistakes and spelling mistakes in your message, change it.
(For Example : Kindly replace the following sentence in your third line, " By the time I woke up, I got ready and tried to start my bike at 10.30 AM.")
Regards,
Vijay
|
| Author: vijay 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 4 |
Continuation of Story....
Started my bike at last and rushed into high traffic.
Finally, I managed to reach Bank at 11:00 AM.
I went to counter to pay money.
I took my purse and searched for money.
Money not found!.
Oh! no!.
Now only I came to know that I left Rs.1000 in my home.
Then ?
|
| Author: Jyothi 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 3 |
Again I started driving to my home.
Then I picked up Rs. 1000 from my Drawer and ran out to start bike and drive to Bank since it was already 12.00 PM.
After completing my work in Bank again and I have to come back to home and prepare for lunch.
Then……
|
| Author: Mala 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
Dear Mr. Vijay,
According to me., i don't find any grammar mistake in my text which needs any change.
(For Example : Kindly replace the following sentence in your third line, " By the time I woke up, I got ready and tried to start my bike at 10.30 AM.")
By the time i woke up == means the time i got from the bed.
I got ready == In this sentence means i was prepared with all my personal things and was out of the house to start my bike.
I don't find any error.
Infact your 5th line of the story needs correction according to me..
(For example :- Now only it came into mind that I left Rs.1000 in my home.
Then ?)
Sorry. Its purely not my intenstion to hurt you in anyway and thanks for letting me know of my error. But i literrally don't find the mistake. Anyway thanks for your guidance. I shall take care of this.
Continuation of the story......... Then i happen to recall how i requested the Bank Manager to arrange for the DD as i was sharp at 11:55am at the Bank steps. My God., the way i filled up the DD challan... that horrible was my handwriting...
The lady clerk sitting at the entrance of the counter just happen to look at my face., after seeing the handwriting at the Demand draft challan..
She looked at the clock at one., and said "Its only 3 minutes left out., What do i do"?? ................
|
| Author: vijay 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 4 |
Hi Mala,
Thank you. I changed my mistake.
Continuation of Mala's Story
After that, ink in the pen is wared out.
Cute boy looked clerk with sad face and said " My pen......"
Clerk didn't got any tension and said " Please can you get out, time is up"
Cute boy came out upset and throwed his pen away in anger.
then? (continue ..)
|
| Author: Jyothi 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 4 |
......then he saw at the road and found that his father was staring at him. Father came near to him and started firing. He started crying and heard a sound of “Ting - Tang”.
Suddenly he opened his eyes and it was the sound of Calling Bell.
Felt easy and got from the bed. Opened and door and ………
|
| Author: Jyothi 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 4 |
Felt easy and got up from the bed. Opened and door and ………
the same girl whom he has dreamt was standing with the smile in her face.
He was stunned by looking at her face. She introduced herself as she came to meet her friend who's residing in the next door. Since the door was locked, she happend to enquire with this guy.
Then......
|
| Author: Jyothi 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
Then he invited her to inside the home.
After getting familier with each other, she asked the guy "Can we have coffee in restaurant". The guy replied, "Why not! just a minute I will get ready".
He changed his dress, combed his hair, had face wash, applied fair and lovely and started his bike.
Suddenly he remembered the contents of his dream and checked his pocket, exactly he don't have single rupee in his pockets. Returned to home and collected the money from the drawer more than Rs. 1000 that his father wanted him to get DD.
First both of them went to Bank and got DD then went to Restaurant and had coffee and breakfast.
The guy felt very happy that he finished every work without getting delay and firings from his father.
Then they returned to home.......
|
| Author: vijay 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 4 |
Hi Jyothi,
Really I never expected this from you.
What a finish you had given to our story.
Very nice, you also gave moral to this story.
It's very good experience for us.
I am very thankful to India study channel.
I expect to have more different stuffs in future.
Regards,
Vijay
|
| Author: Arun Jadhav 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
Complete Story:
Blowing winds, fluttering birds , Barking dogs ..the sky thunders as i open my eyes to see its raining.....its 7 am in the morning .....i place my cold feet on the floor..and i hear a sound ... it was >>>>
............and i hear a sound...it was the alarm of the clock.
Oh! Its 7 am now. Then i looked at the calender and then realised its a Sunday... Wow!! So nice. I put off the alarm clock and slept for a while..
.......in my day dream,
I saw one beautiful girl lifting me up from the bed and hugged me. She asked me, "Can we have coffee in restaurant". I said, "Why not! just a minute I will get ready". I changed my dress , combed my hair, had face wash, applied fair and lovely and started my bike. Then. ( Please continue this story with your imagination)
............ and started my bike. What a bad luck.. there was no petrol in my Bike. I didn't even have a single paise in my pocket.
My dad had given Rs. 1000/- to purchase a demand draft on "The Hindustan Lever Limited". The timing of the bank for purchase or demand draft is only from 9:00am to 11:00AM as it is a Sunday. By the time I woke up and got ready and tried staring my bike it was 10:30AM.... Only half an hour left out.. What to do...........
Started my bike at last and rushed into high traffic.
Finally, I managed to reach Bank at 11:00 AM.
I went to counter to pay money.
I took my purse and searched for money.
Money not found!.
Oh! no!.
Now only I came to know that I left Rs.1000 in my home.
Again I started driving to my home.
Then I picked up Rs. 1000 from my Drawer and ran out to start bike and drive to Bank since it was already 12.00 PM.
After completing my work in Bank again and I have to come back to home and prepare for lunch.
Then i happen to recall how i requested the Bank Manager to arrange for the DD as i was sharp at 11:55am at the Bank steps. My God., the way i filled up the DD challan... that horrible was my handwriting...
The lady clerk sitting at the entrance of the counter just happen to look at my face., after seeing the handwriting at the Demand draft challan..
She looked at the clock at one., and said "Its only 3 minutes left out., What do i do"?? ................
After that, ink in the pen is wared out.
Cute boy looked clerk with sad face and said " My pen......"
Clerk didn't got any tension and said " Please can you get out, time is up"
Cute boy came out upset and throwed his pen away in anger.
then?
......then he saw at the road and found that his father was staring at him. Father came near to him and started firing. He started crying and heard a sound of “Ting - Tang”.
Suddenly he opened his eyes and it was the sound of Calling Bell.
Felt easy and got from the bed. Opened and door and ………
Felt easy and got up from the bed. Opened and door and ………
the same girl whom he has dreamt was standing with the smile in her face.
He was stunned by looking at her face. She introduced herself as she came to meet her friend who's residing in the next door. Since the door was locked, she happend to enquire with this guy.
Then he invited her to inside the home.
After getting familier with each other, she asked the guy "Can we have coffee in restaurant". The guy replied, "Why not! just a minute I will get ready".
He changed his dress, combed his hair, had face wash, applied fair and lovely and started his bike.
Suddenly he remembered the contents of his dream and checked his pocket, exactly he don't have single rupee in his pockets. Returned to home and collected the money from the drawer more than Rs. 1000 that his father wanted him to get DD.
First both of them went to Bank and got DD then went to Restaurant and had coffee and breakfast.
The guy felt very happy that he finished every work without getting delay and firings from his father.
Then they returned to home.......
|
| Author: Arun Jadhav 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 2 |
Hi friends,
This story is the combine effort of Jyothi, Vijay and Mala. Thank you for such a huge response.
Suggest a good name for this story.
Regards
Arun
|
| Author: Mala 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 4 |
The story has come out with a very good ending.
"THE DREAM CAME TRUE", is this title OK, because the boy actuall dreamt which actually came to be true.
Although the story is a copmbine effort of Jyothi, Vijay and Mala, the overall credit goes to Vijay since it was begun by him.
Keep it up Vijay and thank you Jyothi.
Thanks and Regards,
|
| Author: Jyothi 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 2 |
Hello Mala,
It's wonderful. I also thought same title to this story.
What a similar type of thinkings we have.
Regards,
Jyothi.
|
| Author: vijay 05 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 2 |
Hi Friends,
Now I came with another story.
Four friends, Ramu, Raju, Rahul, Ravi.
They are graduates and came to city for searching job.
Then...
|
| Author: Jyothi 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
They are graduates and came to city for searching job.
The city was very new to them and they suffered so much to get accommodation.
One Mr. Ranjit helped them and given a portion of his house to them to stay as “Paying Guest”. Their agreement was once any once of these friends get job, they should start paying for their stay.
Atlast Ramu and Rahul got jobs near to their place.
Then......
|
| Author: Arun Jadhav 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 2 |
Then according to aggreement Ramu and Rahul start paying for their stay.
Suddenly in a road accident Ramu and Rahul injured. Then..
|
| Author: Jyothi 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
Ramu and Rahul were unable to work and they afraid that they may fail to pay.
Meanwhile Raju and Ravi struggled so much to get job and help Ramu and Rahul. Raju could succeed in getting job, but Ravi failed to get.
In this situation, Raju started paying. Ramu, Rahul and Ravi felt guilt because due to their inability, they could not help Raju.
Once Ms. Radha, daughter of Mr. Ranjit had fallen in Love with Ravi. She directly proposed him, but Ravi felt unhappy because his inability in helping his friends made him not to commit Radha.
Then……
|
| Author: vijay 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 5 |
Then Radha asked, " What?, if you are unable to help your friends for that why you want to reject me, it is not fair".Then Ravi asked Radha, " Where are u staying and who is giving money to u?" she said, "I am staying with my father and he is giving money". Now Ravi said "But for me only my friends are there!, we promised before that, whatever we get, we will share among us. Now we are getting sorrows that we have to share, I am among them, How can I be alone happy, while all of my friends are suffering?
Then..........
|
| Author: Jyothi 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
Radha understood his feeling against his friendship and returned to her home.
As the days over, Ravi started self employment in their locality. It’s being a official area, in a family both husband and wife were working and are unable to pay bills like telephone, electricity, water etc. Even nobody was there to look after their children. Ravi observed these circumstances and started collecting bills and amount from the house owners and paid to the respective offices on behalf of them. In turn the house owners were paying some amount like his remuneration.
Now Ravi also started earning equal to his friends. Then……
|
| Author: vijay 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 4 |
Now again Radha came to Ravi and asked " Now u also helping your friends, what you think about me?,Ravi got confused. He asked some time to think of it. At the same time Radha's father came to Ravi and asked "She is not accepting for marriage, you are best friend of her, Can you tell her to accept to marry my partner's son?" then.......
|
| Author: Jyothi 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 4 |
Ravi promised to Mr. Ranjit that he will talk to Radha.
Actually Ravi was in love with Radha from the day one she proposed him. Because of his situation he could not confirm his love.
Once he settles in his life, he thought to tell her about his love. Hence he requested her to give him some time. Sudden action of her father pushed Ravi into confusion.
Then…..
|
| Author: vijay 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 5 |
Then Ravi met Radha, said" Your father yesterday talked with me , he said that you have to accept to marry your father's partner's son". Radha said" ok, then what u said", Ravi said,"I am very poor person, You are rich. You are in the peak, we are under the sea, Your Hotel tips will be our one month salary, You are in good status, we are in bad status. Even though we marry against this, how you will expect me to keep you happy?, your father is good friend for us, he helped us lot, how can I cheat him?. Better you marry your father's choice"
Radha said.....
|
| Author: Jyothi 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 4 |
"OK, you told your opinion, but it is still in my hands to decide my life.
I will talk to my dad about this." Radha said.
Suddenly Ravi "No, please don't do that. I don't want to stand as a criminal in front of your father".
Radha replied "Don't worry, I will not tell about our love. Just I will speak him about my marriage with his partner's son".
Then......
|
| Author: vijay 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 5 |
Then Ravi met Radha, said" Your father yesterday talked with me , he said that you have to accept to marry your father's partner's son". Radha said" ok, then what u said", Ravi said,"I am very poor person, You are rich. You are in the peak, we are under the sea, Your Hotel tips will be our one month salary, You are in good status, we are in bad status. Even though we marry against this, how you will expect me to keep you happy?, your father is good friend for us, he helped us lot, how can I cheat him?. Better you marry your father's choice"
Radha said.....
|
| Author: vijay 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 1 |
Sorry Ignore the previous message
|
| Author: vijay 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 4 |
Radha said, " Before I talk to my father,tell me one thing, will you marry me or not?, This is my life, No one can decide expect me. I don't want any rich life, I will feel rich if I lie in your lap and share your life.I don't want these money and fame. I need only lovable heart which holds me forever. I want your decision? tell me..
|
| Author: Jyothi 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 4 |
Ravi said "I love you and I can marry when your dad permits. Keep in mind he should not have any inconvenience in our marriage”.
Radha happily repied “Oh that’s fine. I can easily convince my dad. Be ready for our marriage”.
Mr. Vijay I don’t wanted to sacrifice her true love. Hence I have given this twist to this story.
Regards,
Jyothi.
|
| Author: vijay 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 5 |
Then Radha went to her father to tell about her love with Ravi.
Father got shocked!
Father said, "I didn't expect this from you Radha, I believed you both are good friends , but you people cheated me, how can you love a begger fellow? how can I compare him with my status. I will kill him!, hereafter you should meet him or talk to him. I will throw all of them from the house. I don't want these people anymore in my house"
Radha cried and cried to convince her father. But no use.
Ravi and his friends are thrown out from that house.
Then.....
|
| Author: Jyothi 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
After coming out from that house, they suffered much get another accommodation. Finally they got a room in working men hostel.
Ravi felt very guilt to talk to his friends, since in such condition he might not accepted Radha’s love.
Ravi could not continue his work since he totally came out from the locality. Always he was sitting by pale face and thinking deeply. Other friends were observing his feelings and decided to divert his mood to some other.
Once Rahul, Ramu and Raju came and spoken to Ravi about this. Ravi explained all the conversation took place between him and Radha and asked sorry for his friends. His eyes were full of tears……
Then….
|
| Author: vijay 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 4 |
After six months..
Still they didn't met after that incident. His father was so strict and sent her to his grandmother's house. She can't able to contact him. Now Radha felt that she missed him a lot. Every minute she felt like living in hell. Then she starting fasting and breaking all the vessels. This issue comes into her father's mind and finally came up with one plan....?
|
| Author: Jyothi 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
This issue comes into her father's mind and finally came up with one plan....?
He met his daughter and convinced her as if he permitted to her marriage with Ravi, but with a condition. That is he has to earn at least Rs. 1,00,000/- with in a month time. If Ravi fulfills this condition, Mr. Ranjit do not have any problem to give his daughter to Ravi.
But he has another idea that he will never allow Ravi to earn the conditioned amount.
In these circumstances.....
|
| Author: Mala 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 2 |
What a condition has Mr. Ranjit put to Radha. Will Ravi be able to marry Radha? Will Mr. Ranjit be an obstracle to Ravi.
Lets see what happens.
|
| Author: vijay 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 2 |
Radha said surely Ravi will earn Rs. 1 lakh , I have confident that he will win the race.
Radha meets Ravi and informed about the condition, he replies " WE WILL WIN"
NOW INTERVAL...
|
| Author: Jyothi 06 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 4 |
After interval the story begins with Ravi.
He was in suite and driving the car. He was on the way to Radha’s residence to talk to Mr. Ranjit about his marriage with Radha.
While driving he was recollecting his memories about previous days i.e how he could achieve the present level (flash back).
Then....
|
| Author: vijay 07 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 5 |
Now Ravi thinks how can we earn Rs. 1 lakh within a month!
But he can't get any idea to earn money.
He got many bad ideas to get money, But he don't like to approach in wrong way.
He was so upset. Radha suddenly came one day and gave Rs.1 lakh amount to Ravi and said," After 30 days you give this amount to my father". First he refused but at last got money from her , but her father saw this!. He scolded both in bad words and took money from him and warned to earn money from your hard work not from my money.
Ravi joined in one hotel as a server....
|
| Author: Jyothi 07 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
Actually Ravi was having a good skill in singing. He was a very good singer. Due to unavailability of opportunity he could not succeed. Another reason was, his father was not happy with him because he always spending his more with friends and music.
His father aim was to make him IAS Officer. But he could not get sufficient marks in graduation to get seat in IAS.
His father was very upset due to his negligence and started treating him as a useless fellow. In this bad condition, he could stay there any more and made move to City with his friends.
Now he started working as a Hotel server. During his duty hours, he was singing nice songs with his nice voice. This has impressed most of the people there and they preferred to visit his hotel again and again.
It’s already 10 days over. He was thinking deeply, how to earn 1,00,000 within 20 days. Meanwhile a famous Music Director heard his voice and impressed with him so much. One day he met Ravi and offered a chance to work in his Cinema.
Ravi got very good chances after his first film song. He became a very good singer now and earned lakhs together within 15 days.
Having these qualifications now is driving to Radha’s residence.
Then....
|
| Author: vijay 07 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 5 |
Now, Radha's Father got this information that Ravi earned lakhs of amount. But he still don't like to give Radha to him.
So he planned to kill him on the way,
So he arranged some Killers and ordered them to kill him on the road and make it that as an accident.
On the 18th day,
Ravi is on the way to recording theatre.
As per planned,
Killer's hit him on the road and Ravi is in very serious position and admitted in hospital...
|
| Author: Jyothi 07 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 4 |
Radha came to know about this accident and came to see Ravi.
There were all his friends are seriously moving from here to there. Once Radha entered Hospital, friends informed all the matter about his father.
Suddenly Radha returned to home and argued with her father about this incident. She clearly told her decision that she will definitely marry Ravi. Nobody can avoid her.
Then.....
|
| Author: vijay 07 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 4 |
Ravi still in serious condition,
30 days over.
No thoughts about Rs. 1 lakh. Now Radha is fully worried about Ravi, when he will get cured.
She stays day and night with Ravi and didn't went to her house.
After few days,
He got cured and they decided to marry. All of his friends were planned to help Ravi.
Radha's Father got this information.....
|
| Author: Jyothi 07 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Diamond | Rating: Points: 5 |
Immediately he arranged some killers and sends to kidnap Radha. They done as he told.
After hearing this news all four friends arrived to help Radha and succeeded. A big fight - dishoom, dishoom.
Now the climax. All four friends advised Mr. Ranjit. As the result he became a good man. He arranged for marriage with Ravi and finally they all were happy in their life.
Here the story ends.
|
| Author: vijay 07 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 5 |
Ha! Ha !
At last our story came to end!
It's pretty different experience in my life.
I thank ISC for giving me this opportunity.
I suggested one title for our story.
"FOUR BACHELORS"
If you think it's not suitable, anyone can suggest good title for this story sorry film.
If possible, can come up with any moral or message from this story.
If it's acceptable, they will get nice gifts from me.
Regards
Vijay
|
| Author: Ditty KM 08 Nov 2007 | Member Level: Bronze | Rating: Points: 5 |
and i heard a sound ... it was the sound of my neighbour... he was saying something to my dad. It was not clear to me...suddenly i went out of the room...I saw a lot of people there...i didn't understand anything...I saw my mother in her room...she was crying...I asked her "mom what happened? Why these people are in our home"....she didn't answer...but she called me near her and told "Vave...your grandpa....God called him.... he went to heaven"....
My grandpa..........why he went to the heaven without saying anything to me....I fall down to the bed....I was the best friend of him. my grandpa...the one who will take me to the temple every day... the one who will play with me.....My everything...my god....
|
| Author: Kenny 19 May 2008 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 2 |
then
|
| Author: Kenny 19 May 2008 | Member Level: Gold | Rating: Points: 2 |
Sorry, ditty you have gone out of the story. Also the story ended
|