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    Fire welcomed her with open hands.

    Hurling huge boulders onto the fortress using their catapults
    Khilji's army forced out the Rajput warriors of Chittorgarh
    Hoisting their shields, brandishing their swords
    Towing their lances, charging on their horse
    The bloodthirsty forces clashed and collided
    Leaving several thousands mutilated and dead.
    The cyclone from Delhi has eyed this paradise
    Khilji has waited for this very moment all his life.

    Rana Ratan Singh, was at the tip of his spear
    He plunged it into the chest of Rana's charioteer.
    Rana descended with saber and shield
    Fighting on foot in an unforgiving battlefield
    Thumping and tangling cold-blooded steel
    Struggling to sweep the enemy by the heel.
    The mounted sultan had a clear edge
    His horse toppled Rana and trampled his head
    Without sparing a moment's relief, Khilji strikes
    Hit by a dozen arrows, Rana lay paralyzed

    Fallen Rana was decapitated
    All Rajput men were annihilated.
    The grave news was delivered to expecting wives
    Rani Padmavati summoned them and said

    "Surrender? What is life without pride?
    Haven't our men fought bravely and died?
    Khilji won't get what he desired!
    We'll become one with fire and fly."

    Padmaavati's words turned veiled women into iron clad knights
    They all cried out in unison and prepared for their final rights.
    Khilji eventually knocked the doors down
    Only to see his passion and his love burn in front of his sight.
    Padmaavati gladly walked into the inferno
    Other women followed her in a row

    Fire welcomed her with open hands
    Spreading her story throughout the lands
  • #625207
    Wow what a narration depicted in poem format on the lives of Khilji and Padmavathi. The mentions were so real that I can visualise such things happening in front of my eyes,
    K Mohan
    'Idhuvum Kadandhu Pogum "
    Even this challenging situation would ease

  • #625227
    Aditya, what a write up! Awesome indeed. It only bring the proud feeling when a youth like you bring out his/her emotions in writing such a way that the next word "wow" automatic comes like reflex action. Its amazing to read.

  • #625236
    A very nice narration. A unique way of writing. I am delighted to read the presentation. Very well presented. The determination of not to surrender to the Khilji is the motive of the lady. She has done it by inviting the death and thus she proved that she prefers dying than going with the enemy. What an integrity. Really a bold lady with a lot of guts. I am very much excited to read the post and my appreciations to the author for the nice presentation.
    always confident

  • #625246
    An excellent poem! I am really impressed! I don't have more to say. Keep up writing poems and don't discontinue due to any future commitments. Try to compile your poems and in future, try to get the poems published.
    Beware! I question everything and everybody.

  • #625247
    An excellent rendition Aditya, I liked the way the narration ends with evil left empty handed. It like a moral story with a class narration.

  • #627796
    Wow. What a unique way to tell a story. Aditya, you have got very nice skills or you have acquired it very nicely. This is a unique way to represent your points.
    Dr. Paresh B. Gujarati.
    Mechanical Engineer.
    'I'mprovement always begins with 'I'.

  • #627798
    Nicely worded rhyming poem about a great lady who welcomed and embraced fire to show the might of Indian women. Padmavati lives.Great is your poetic talent, Aditya.

    @ Let us know the time consumed to write this lovely poem.

    No life without Sun

  • #627801
    No doubt it is an excellent poem, but the thread is more than 10 days old.
    Beware! I question everything and everybody.

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