A hard hitting post - somethings need to be said aloudIt is saddening to read the disapproving tone of a couple of posts in this competition entry. No one deserves such critical reviews. I don't understand this push to kill the author's creativity. It is a competition entry, not a lesson for a kindergarten class that requires to be written keeping in mind the understanding capacity of the reader.
Those on a fault-finding mission should perhaps take a deeper look at themselves to see what is wanting in them. There is an obvious absence of knowledge and comprehension on their part, but they chose to blame their inadequacies on the author.
This is indeed a learning portal, but no one will hold your hand and walk you through your learning process. That initiative has to be yours; you have to make an effort to learn. Appreciate the author's intellect and abilities, and seek answers rather than passing disapproving comments.