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    A courageous boy on a nocturnal adventure (Part-II)

    (Continued from: A courageous boy on a nocturnal adventure)

    The young boy crossed their garden and avoided the pond. He turned left and reached the 'ghat' (bank) of the Padma. Mighty Padma was roaring and black water was flowing. The angry Padma in the monsoon session can make anyone afraid, but the young boy was experienced and used to such nocturnal adventures.

    He took out one of the two fishing rods, examined it carefully, adjusted its angle and reach, put earthworms at one end and placed the end in the water. The fishing rod was foreign-made and was a prized possession of the boy, who was almost an expert in fishing sport even at such an young age.

    The courageous young boy was enjoying the silent nocturnal beauty of their own ghat of the Padma. The sweet smell of flowers of the garden and cool breeze from the river changed the night to a mysterious lady. The moon was floating in the sky. Not a single soul was there. 'Ruposhi Bangla' (Beautiful Bengal) was present with all her enchanting beauty.

    Suddenly a harsh pull of the fishing-rod made the boy very alert. Perhaps a very big fish got stuck! The force with which it was pulling the rod, made it evident. The boy applied all his fishing knowledge and started to apply every technique to bring it near the shore, but he realized that the movement of the fist which was stuck , was not like a normal fish. In the water, its power got manifold and it moved inside the river in a different manner than that of a fish.

    In this tug-of-war between the boy and the fish, gradually the fish was winning. The boy was slowly forced to move towards the river. Eventually, he entered the ferocious Padma at the dead of night, but even then the thought of leaving the fish didn't cross his mind.

    In the cold and fast-moving river, the courageous boy suddenly realized that it was not a big fish, but a very big Gangetic turtle which got stuck in his fishing-rod. It was an unexpected event for him and would be a much better hunt. He tried to hold the turtle with his left hand while trying to maneuver the fishing rod with his right. But, the rod gave away.

    The fishing rod could no longer take the fight. The 'Made in England' fishing-rod broke into two pieces. The fight between the boy and the turtle in the river at the dead of night continued in which the boy was slowly losing.
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    Samsuddin was returning to his humble hut. He was dejected. He failed in his own nocturnal adventure. He could not steal anything that night. He suddenly noticed that something unnatural was going on in the river. He ran forward.

    In the dim moonlight, he saw a young boy inside the river wrestling with something. Samsu didn't wait further; he jumped into the river and reached the wrestling-site. He was stunned.

    The young son of the freedom-fighters' family ('swadeshi-bari') was floating in the river. But he immediately realized the boy was very much alive and fighting with an animal. He said: "Samsu, I must take it home; help me out."

    Now, the turtle started losing the game. After more than thirty minutes, the young boy and Samsu brought the gigantic turtle to the shore. Bringing it to the shore they immediately 'turned the turtle', so that it couldn't flee or attack.

    Very slowly but with utmost satisfaction, they reached the boy's residence with the turtle. The elders were astonished and stunned! Samsu got cash and kind much more than he ever imagined (but no turtle meat which is prohibited for the Muslims).

    The little girl was awe-struck by the exploits of her elder brother. Her brother became the hero for the rest of his (brother's) life.

    [Entry: Flash Fiction Writing: Re-opening]
  • #760644
    Any editor may please delete the last command of the post. It can't be edited from my end.
    (a) Those who have forgotten Noakhali, how can they protest Sandeshkhali?
    (b) Have no fear of perfection - you'll never reach it. ---------- Salvador Dali

  • #760645
    Partha,

    I have corrected the HTML tag. You had put the symbol before the ending 'a' the other way around.

    When you make a commitment, you create hope. When you keep a commitment you create trust! ~ John C. Maxwell

  • #760648
    Thanks a lot, Madam!
    (a) Those who have forgotten Noakhali, how can they protest Sandeshkhali?
    (b) Have no fear of perfection - you'll never reach it. ---------- Salvador Dali

  • #760670
    A nicely written story. A good narration. Destiny plays an important role in our lives. At that difficult moment, God sent Samsuddin to save our hero, the courageous boy. He might have got into big trouble otherwise. He could not catch the fish but got a turtle. The boy is happy with the turtle and took the help of Samsuddin to catch the same and became the hero in the eyes of his sister. My appreciation to the author.
    drrao
    always confident

  • #760698
    The first part of the story is as thrilling as the courageous went in the night to catch the fish alone. However, there are some twists and turns in the second part of the story which was nicely written and composed by the author. The character of Samsuddin came into play and the courageous boy gets help from him to catch a big turtle for his sister as he promised. The story tells us that if we want to do something big, we can achieve it with our courage and this has been shown by the boy.

  • #760705
    The author has once again proved a great writer with two parts on the subject matter and what is inspiring is the way he described the things to the understanding level of the members. If someone helps in our life, that would be the greater moment, no matter who it is and what for he helped. But the moment of joy and achievement would be excellent. And how to fish in the water is also brought out very well. For example some may jump in ecstasy that they caught a big fish but when the total net is drawn and content seen inside, it is not the fish but a big turtle. One more thing we should always expect big and great things to happen in our life and if somethings happen below expectations even that should be accepted. Writing a content as if it is happening in front of us is the great trait of writing and the author proved himself more successful in this regard.
    K Mohan
    'Idhuvum Kadandhu Pogum "
    Even this challenging situation would ease


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