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    Life at your service

    An extremely disturbed Samira was dragging her feet on the footpath as an aimless lady, cluelessly expecting some miracle to happen and change her life overnight. She had never thought that one day she would be left all alone. It's not that something unexpected had occurred, but naturally, her aged parents had left for their heavenly abode within a short gap, which left her alone.

    It's a regular feature for the last two months that Samira feels reluctant to enter the empty house, so she roams around every evening after her office. One day, she notices a shabby building beside a footpath and 'Motivational Hall' is inscribed on its door. Samira feels an immense willingness to get inside the building. She does so and sees no one present there. It disturbs her a little, and hurriedly, she turns back towards the way out.

    'Do not go back, and find your inner peace here.' sounds a loud but mesmerising voice. Samira gets a little nervous and instantly turns back. Still, there is no one, so whose voice was that, thinks Samira. Again, the same voice retorts: 'You won't be able to see me, but I can. He adds that you write down your inner turmoil on a sheet of paper, which you will get beside a collection box, and then drop it in the box.' The voice further conveys Samira to come back to the hall the next day at the same time for the solution to her problem.

    Samira takes some time to decide what she should do. Finally, she decides to share her problem with the unknown voice to have some solution to her deep pain and loneliness. She writes about her desperation, drops it in the collection box and walks towards the hall door.

    Quite naturally, Samira fails to forget the whole incident and even spends a sleepless night. She remains restless throughout the next day and eagerly waits for the evening when she has to go to the Meditation Hall for the solution to her crisis. The waiting period is over, and Samira enters the hall while her heart is in fast-beating mode. She expects to meet the concealed person whose voice she had heard a day ago. To her surprise, the Meditation Hall is just the same as yesterday and not a single person is there. She becomes sad and has no clue what to expect next. Samira waits there restlessly for some time and then decides to leave the hall. Suddenly, a voice quipped: "Your lack of patience leads to a lack of confidence. Nothing is permanent. Accept the reality, and you will lead a hassle-free life. Spend valuable time with lonely people, and, in return, you will find solace and meaning in your life.

    All of a sudden, Samira becomes relaxed. Her inner voice says that she has got a motto in life. She will spend some valuable time with lonely people staying in old homes. The whole idea fills her with zeal. She comes home and starts listing down the shelter homes for aged people. Finally, Samira says goodbye to her loneliness and finds a motto in life to add zing to the lives of lonely people.

    Submission for:
    Creative Writing Story Contest
  • #776278
    A good story. A lonely person can meet another lonely person so that both of them can leave their loneliness. Serving the needy is one way of spending our time qualitatively. We can spend our time just walking on the road or chit-chatting with another person. But if we help others that will give us immense happiness and we feel that we did some useful work.
    It is good that some unknown voice has given a solution to the problem of a lonely lady. Such motivation halls are the need of the hour I feel. In this busy life, everybody is not having peace of mind with some or other problem. If they can find solutions for their problems from these motivation halls, we will see a different society, I feel.
    As usual, the author has come out with a good story and narrated it well.

    drrao
    always confident

  • #776284
    The author has presented a nice story how Samira could resolve her issues with her visit to a shabby place inscribed as motivation hall. On entering the hall, she could not come across any one other than the emergence of a strange voice directing her to post her issues in writing and to drop the same in the box seen in the hall.
    Next day, on entering the hall she got the valuable message with a strange voice directing her to pass her time with the lonely persons. Her meetings with the lonely persons would bring her happiness.
    The story is quite interesting and offers a purposeful message.

  • #776325
    An interesting story indeed. Samira was lonely and was also feeling disturbed. A visit to the motivation hall changed her life. Yes, sometimes these things happen in a miraculous way which cannot be explained in simple terms.
    Psychologists believe that there is sometimes a conflict created between our inner strength and our outer physical body and most of the times we ignore it and remain in the realm of our sadness that has engulfed us so severely. That is the time when we require some motivation or encouragement either from outside or from our inner strength which is obviously a strong entity. Something like that had happened with Samira and she came out from her state of melancholy.

    Knowledge is power.


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